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BeitragThema: lost smile   Mo Jun 25, 2012 11:23 pm

Englisch...wie bin ich nur darauf gekommen???

I remeber, as you told me once of a girl who never smiled.
Her eyes were large and rigid. She had a scar that ran across her face. From the left eye to the right corner.
People were everywhere for finger at her and told each other the most cruel and bizarsten stories. She lived in a tiny council flat with her mother and her siblings. There was no father.
One day, a car, the girl got in, and from then on never seen again.
I've been thinking a lot about the history.
But I could never find out why the girl should have never smiled.
Perhaps just no one saw her when she smiled.
So I went searching for the lost smile.
I walked through the streets and asked the people for the lost smile. But no one could tell me where it was.
So I left the city and continued my search.
After a while I was gone, I found a picture lying on the roadside.
It showed a girl who wore a scar on his face.
She did not smile. Her face was distorted from pain, and she looked at me with big, blank eyes.
So I put it back and went on undaunted.
After some time I came to a small hut covered by dark ivy. I went in and found a framed picture on the wall on which was the same girl again.
This time the face was twisted into a grimace. The face hung in tatters from his head, and around them were people in white coats. They had Metal objekts in their hands and walked towards the girl.
She did not smile.
So I left the house and moved on.
But this time the road was steep and dreary, and he led steeply uphill.
The sweat ran into my face and I squinted his eyes against the burning sun.
When I arrived at the top of the hill, I saw you standing in the light.
I began to smile broadly. I had found my smile.
When you turned to me, a long sharp knife was flashing in your hands.
While you were smiling friendly on me, you say a few words quietly.
"I've seen her smile once."
Since then they burn me with their eyes. And one day I will get into your car, and the thing Prepare an end.

Sinnlos und so, aber ich musste mir irgendwas ausdenken, sonst wär ich bald geplatzt >->
Englisch auf Fehler schauen darf jeder gern xD Viel Spaß dabei, ich kann kein Englisch, also so D:
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BeitragThema: Re: lost smile   Di Jun 26, 2012 4:31 pm

Richtig coole Geschichte! Shocked Und dein Englisch ist doch gar nicht so schlecht, abgesehen von ein paar Kleinigkeiten Wink Mal sehen, vielleicht setz ich mich heute nochmal daran, die zu verbessern Very Happy
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BeitragThema: Re: lost smile   Di Jun 26, 2012 9:01 pm

Danke Very Happy Geil, das du das für mich machen würdest öwö
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BeitragThema: Re: lost smile   Di Jun 26, 2012 9:31 pm

Ok dann wollen wir mal Smile
Flieger schrieb:
I remember as you told me once of a girl who never smiled.
Her eyes were large and rigid. She had a scar that ran across her face. From the left eye to the right corner.
People were everywhere to point the finger at her and told each other the most cruel and most bizarre stories. She lived in a tiny council flat with her mother and her siblings. There was no father.
One day, a car, the girl got in, and from then on never seen again.
I've been thinking a lot about the story.
But I could never find out why the girl should have never smiled.
Perhaps just no one saw her when she smiled.
So I went searching for the lost smile.
I walked through the streets and asked the people for the lost smile. But no one could tell me where it was.
So I left the city and continued my search.
After I had walked for a while, I found a picture lying on the roadside.
It showed a girl who wore a scar on her face.
She did not smile. Her face was distorted from pain, and she looked at me with big, blank eyes.
So I put it back and went on undaunted.
After some time I came to a small hut covered by dark ivy. I went in and found a framed picture on the wall in which was the same girl again.
This time the face was twisted into a grimace. The face hung in tatters from her head, and around her were people in white coats. They had metal objects in their hands and walked towards the girl.
She did not smile.
So I left the house and moved on.
But this time the road was steep and dreary, and it led steeply uphill.
The sweat ran into my face and I squinted his eyes against the burning sun.
When I arrived at the top of the hill, I saw you standing in the light.
I began to smile broadly. I had found my smile.
When you turned to me, a long sharp knife was flashing in your hands.
While you were smiling friendly to me, you say a few words quietly.
"I've seen her smile once."
Since then they burn me with their eyes. And one day I will get into your car, and prepare an end of this matter.

Bei einigen Dingen war ich mir selbst nicht sicher *schäm schäm* Embarassed Also es kann sein, dass andere auch noch ein bisschen war verbessern müssen. Bin selbst kein Englisch-Profi :'D
Aber wie gesagt (ich hab die Geschichte ja jetzt nochmal gelesen Wink ), ich find die richtig, richtig gut! Bei dem "I had found my smile" denkt man erst, jetzt ist alles Friede, Freude, Eierkuchen und dann kommt das mit dem Messer O.O Hab mich richtig erschrocken Razz
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BeitragThema: Re: lost smile   Di Jun 26, 2012 10:14 pm

Danke :3
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BeitragThema: Re: lost smile   Di Jun 26, 2012 10:27 pm

Kein Problem Very Happy
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